Hooking in?

Walt: writing introductions that orientate and hook in our audience.

First try: 

This term for trade and enterprise Team 4 are making products to sell and earn Pt’s and pieces. In the end we can use our Pt’s and pieces to buy other people's products or use them for the auction. As will, we've got our own on line banking to see how much currents that we have been saving.

With a ?

Do you know what we are learning about for trade and enterprise? Team 4 are making products to sell and earn Pt’s and pieces. In the end we can use our Pt’s and pieces to buy other people's products or use them for the auction, as well we've got our own on line banking to see how much currents that we are saving.

With a ! 

This term for trade and enterprise team 4 are making products to sell,  this is how  we earn Pt’s and pieces. In the end we can use our Pt’s and pieces to buy other people's products or use them for the auction, as will we've got our own on line banking to see how much currents that we are saving. PT’s are hard to earn!

With facts

This term for trade and enterprise Team 4 are making products to sell, this is how we earn Pt’s and pieces. In the end we can use our Pt’s and pieces to buy other people's products or use them for the auction, as will we've got our own on line banking to see how much currents that we have been saving. 50 pieces is worth one dollar of a New Zealand coin.

This is my business partner. Me and Yvonne are going

around to other peoples business group to see what

 they are making. Lani and Vinolia are taking order from

other people who wants to buy from our group. We

   take turns staying to take orders and going to other people

business groups.